https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=StTEvq1usjA
My elevator pitch is about my business idea which is a mobile scooter repair service. The video includes my introduction and then an overview of what my service provides to customers. I was told by my peers that I needed to have a more attentive but informative energy in this elevator pitch. I think I improved on that. I also think my pitch is more clear and understandable in this one than it was in the last. I also think I did a good job of outlining how it will benefit students and gave examples. I think that all the feedback I received was legitimate and beneficial. I found that improving the "mood" of my pitch was very important as well. I improved this new pitch by changing the energy and flow of my pitch. This one was more clear and relatable. I think it'll reach customers better this way and will also be more convincing.
Hi Riley,
ReplyDeleteI think you did a really good job understanding some of the negative feedback you received on your product. rather than being arrogant, you listened to your feedback and made some valuable changes to your product. I enjoyed how you changed the mood of your pitch from last time to now. I agree with you when you say tht this pitch was much clearer and easier to understand. In conclusion, keep up the great work and I am excited to see how your final product will come out.
Hi Riley,
ReplyDeleteYour pitch is pretty good. It outlines what you want out of the business, the problem the business solves, and how it solves that problem. I want to support this business after watching. Gainesville does have at least one business that will come to your location, but I haven't heard of one yet that fixes scooters on the spot.
Hi, This summary of what you learned was nicely put together in a fashion that shows the progression you made to give the pitch that you did. It shows that you have improved and really thought over what you learned in order to incorporate it.
ReplyDeleteRiley,
ReplyDeleteI liked that you opened the itch with how this service originally related to you. For me, I feel as though this would immediately engage the person listening to the pitch because ti really opens the conversation up, as opposed to simply just spewing a bunch of statistics about something that your service could fix. Your pitch wasn't so much about shocking the customer, rather involving and engaging the customer which I appreciate.
Hi riley,
ReplyDeleteI found your second elevator pitch to be very thorough and well-thought out. You clearly have taken your feedback from your first elevator pitch, and used it to improve upon your second attempt. You have successfully identified an opportunity and formulated an effective business model. Being able to give an effective elevator pitch for a product is an essential part of promoting a product. This seems to be a skill you have mastered.